How would I end a personal essay about myself? Please help.?

“Wow”, I’m back to College. I thought after attending Bryman College I was done with school, news’s flash that was the being of nothing. I always said that by the time I was twenty-five I would be done with my Bachelors degree in Business / Accounting, and that I would own a house, with no children. Well I’m twenty-four years old now. I just started going back to college, to peruse my degree in Business / Accounting, which I always have dreamed of having. I am happily currently married and have a beautiful 19-month-old son, who keeps my hands full. My son Michael is the reason why I decided to go back to school. Life right now is not going as planed, but I would not change it for the world.

I graduated from Pioneer High School in 2002. Right after High School I attended Rio Hondo Community College, however that did not go as planed. I was working part time at Home Depot as a cashier and attending Rio Hondo as a full time student. I was not completely focused on school, I knew that I wanted to be there but for some reason or another, school was not for me at that moment. I then attended Bryman College and graduated with a Diploma in Business Administration, which lead me into the career that I want to peruse.

I am majoring in Business Accounting because I like numbers and I find it very interesting when I have to do audit research. My first office job was at Katzkin Leather Interiors Corp, where there I started as an Accounts Receivable Clerk. I really enjoyed my job, but after two years there I found it very boring, doing the same thing over and over. There was no room for advancement I then found a better job at Paragon Schmid Building Products, where there I was the Accounts Receivable and Billing Specialist. I was very happy there as well but after two years there I became pregnant. After maternity leave I did not return back to work because it was too far of a commute for me. I then found a better paying and closer job to home, which was great. I then realized that these jobs, I am getting only require a High School diploma.

In about five years from now, I want to be a Graduate from a Cal State University, with a Bachelors Degree in Business / Accounting. I want to peruse my career in accounting working for the FBI or the IRS. In about ten years from now, my son will be eleven- years old. I would expect to have a house for him. I also see myself financially stable, maybe even having another child. I also see myself growing in the company, which I would be working for. In about twenty- years from now, my son would be twenty-one years old. I would expect him to be attending a University finishing his first two years of college. I would only be in my forty’s so I would still be working. Or maybe I would have my own business, a tax service company. Or maybe I would go back to college to get a Master’s Degree. But in order for all my dreams and goals to become reality I have to first earn a Bachelors Degree.

Currently I’m attending Cerritos Community College, I am working on a Business Administration transfer program, which would transfer me to Cal State Dominguez Hills or Cal State Long Beach, to earn a Bachelors Degree in Business / Accounting. I know by coming back to school, I am going to have to conquer many obstacles, especially now that I have a child. However I see this as a new beginning for me, and it’s for the best. I came back to school for many reasons one being that I need to further my education in order to get the career I want. Second would be family values, I want my son to go to college too, and I would have to set an example for him. Third, I feel that by going to college it will make feel better about my self, in the sense that I have educated my self. Fourth I feel that if I want a better future for family, and myself I must earn my degree.How would I end a personal essay about myself? Please help.?
OK as it is - it looks to the future so no need for any overly finite flourish.How would I end a personal essay about myself? Please help.?
Its a very interesting read. I don't think you need to add anything to end it though. It's fine as it is.
is this like a c.v. coz its a bit too informative about your working acheivements...if its a c.v. its good ...end by saying u look forward to an amazing future with great kids and a wonderful husband, but also to getting a good job and be able to educate those still learning in their young years.



however, if this is just an essay about urself, liven up a little, and describe stuff about yourself. focus on u as a person and not the feats u want...be a little lighter on the educational side of ur life



good luck

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Your first problem is paragraphs that are too long. Cut them up (by topic) and use Transitional phrases to make the connection obvious.

...Through a degree in accounting I will be better able to support my family.



You might consider working for a tax service and see if you really like the work. Have you investigated the requirements for applying for a job with the IRS? Many community colleges have a Career Day. Go. You might learn valuable information.